Original 1: mr. palonia says that there are some athletes who are on this here team that believe noone should not have any practice
Revised 1: Mr. Palonia said that there are some athletes on this team that believe everyone should practice.
Sentence 2: to ensure success they should require those in the project the ones doing the experiment too have new lab equipment
Revised 2: To ensure success they should require those in the project - the ones doing the experiment - to have new lab equipments.
DOL 4
Original 1: darnel dont have no reason too question them instructions but he does want a explanation for this here exam
Revised 1: Darnel doesn't have a reason to question the instructions, but he does want an explanation for this exam.
Original 2: me and olga went downtown we went to buy new notebooks we need them for class we also need them for our long term project
Revised 2: Olga and I went downtown to buy the new notebooks that we need for class and our long term project.
DOL 5
Original 1: yes terri won the game but at the time we dont know that she had
Revised 1: Yes, Terri won the game - but at that time we didn't know that she had.
Original 2: the affect of the program cancellation which bothered most of we members was to end the project before we can finish
Revised 2: The effect of the program cancellation, which bothered most of us members, was that the project was ended before we could finish.
DOL 6
Original 1: because you should of heard their voice when i told them how there vacaion time would be effected
Revised 1: Because you should have heard their voices when I told them how their vacation time would be affected.
Original 2: irregardless of what grandpa says itll be alright to bring a friend to the family celebration
Revised 2: Regardless of what Grandpa says, it'll be alright to bring a friend to the family celebration.
DOL 9
Sentence 1: ms perez the science teacher stated within a short time free-electron lasers will change the world as much as the invention of electricity did because it changed the world
Sentence 2: yesterday mom told us that whomever borrows her new sweater have to take it to the cleaners
DOL 10
Sentence 1: our Social Studies teacher asked us who have her as a teacher to write reports ont he south she said it was to be an emphasis on african americans
Sentence 2: well i think someones mother should volunteer to bring the rest of us girls to the concert
DOL 11
Original 1: my oldest sister whose going to live in the new east town apartments wants youre help moving in tonite
Revised 1: My oldest sister, who's going to live in the new East Town apartments, wants your help moving in tonight.
Original 2: at the end of her speech amanda said if you need farther informations dont hesitate to ask me for more information
Revised 2: At the end of her speech, Amanda said "If you need further information dont hesitate to ask me for more information."
DOL 12
Original 1:having read the novel the man in the iron mask i wanna find out more about the french revolution
Revised 1: Having read the novel "The Man in the Iron Mask", I want to find out more about the French Revolution.
Sentence 2: there were to many things to do i couldnt finish my homework practicing my soccer skills or go to my friends concert
Revised 2: Because there were too many things to do, I couldn't finish my homework, practice my soccer skills, or go to my friends concert.
DOL 13
Original 1: mr. Guarino told us that the 24th corps which was assigned to germany after world war 2 helped maintain peace in that there country
Revised 1: Mr. Guarino told us that the 24th corps which were assigned to Germany after World War 2 helped to maintain peace in the country.
Original 2: having finished her foreign exchange trip a plane ticket was requested to the united states at the end of her foreign exchange trip
Revised 2: Having finished her foreign exchange trip, she requested a plane ticket to the United States at its end.
DOL 15
Original 1: he was incidentally unable to attend hour 15th high-school reunion he just couldn't make it because he lives too far away
Revised 1: Incidentally, he was unable to attend our 15th high school reunion because he lives too far away.
Original 2: it says that irregardless of the effect of poor weather the shakespearean play romeo and juliet will be sold out
Revised 2: It says that regardless of the poor weather, the Shakespearean play, Romeo and Juliet, will be sold out.
DOL 17
Sentence 1: does caroline know weather raul might of come to the class council meeting at 600pm or was he off of student government
Sentence 2: there are 3 qualities that are existing that give this field hockey team the better advantage in the league a terrific goalie a great offense and a winning spirit
DOL 20
Sentence 1: yes their going to welcome whomever want to come to the rally weather democrat or republican
Revised 1: Yes, they're going to welcome anyone who wants to come to the rally, whether democrat or republican.
Sentence 2: this car a 1966 mustang is now extremely valuable irregardless of what he tv show classic cars reports
Revised 2: This car, a 1966 mustang, is now extremely valuable, regardless of what the TV show Classic Cars reports.
Original 1: mr. palonia says that there are some athletes who are on this here team that believe noone should not have any practice
Revised 1: Mr. Palonia said that there are some athletes on this team that believe everyone should practice.
Sentence 2: to ensure success they should require those in the project the ones doing the experiment too have new lab equipment
Revised 2: To ensure success they should require those in the project - the ones doing the experiment - to have new lab equipments.
DOL 4
Original 1: darnel dont have no reason too question them instructions but he does want a explanation for this here exam
Revised 1: Darnel doesn't have a reason to question the instructions, but he does want an explanation for this exam.
Original 2: me and olga went downtown we went to buy new notebooks we need them for class we also need them for our long term project
Revised 2: Olga and I went downtown to buy the new notebooks that we need for class and our long term project.
DOL 5
Original 1: yes terri won the game but at the time we dont know that she had
Revised 1: Yes, Terri won the game - but at that time we didn't know that she had.
Original 2: the affect of the program cancellation which bothered most of we members was to end the project before we can finish
Revised 2: The effect of the program cancellation, which bothered most of us members, was that the project was ended before we could finish.
DOL 6
Original 1: because you should of heard their voice when i told them how there vacaion time would be effected
Revised 1: Because you should have heard their voices when I told them how their vacation time would be affected.
Original 2: irregardless of what grandpa says itll be alright to bring a friend to the family celebration
Revised 2: Regardless of what Grandpa says, it'll be alright to bring a friend to the family celebration.
DOL 9
Sentence 1: ms perez the science teacher stated within a short time free-electron lasers will change the world as much as the invention of electricity did because it changed the world
Sentence 2: yesterday mom told us that whomever borrows her new sweater have to take it to the cleaners
DOL 10
Sentence 1: our Social Studies teacher asked us who have her as a teacher to write reports ont he south she said it was to be an emphasis on african americans
Sentence 2: well i think someones mother should volunteer to bring the rest of us girls to the concert
DOL 11
Original 1: my oldest sister whose going to live in the new east town apartments wants youre help moving in tonite
Revised 1: My oldest sister, who's going to live in the new East Town apartments, wants your help moving in tonight.
Original 2: at the end of her speech amanda said if you need farther informations dont hesitate to ask me for more information
Revised 2: At the end of her speech, Amanda said "If you need further information dont hesitate to ask me for more information."
DOL 12
Original 1:having read the novel the man in the iron mask i wanna find out more about the french revolution
Revised 1: Having read the novel "The Man in the Iron Mask", I want to find out more about the French Revolution.
Sentence 2: there were to many things to do i couldnt finish my homework practicing my soccer skills or go to my friends concert
Revised 2: Because there were too many things to do, I couldn't finish my homework, practice my soccer skills, or go to my friends concert.
DOL 13
Original 1: mr. Guarino told us that the 24th corps which was assigned to germany after world war 2 helped maintain peace in that there country
Revised 1: Mr. Guarino told us that the 24th corps which were assigned to Germany after World War 2 helped to maintain peace in the country.
Original 2: having finished her foreign exchange trip a plane ticket was requested to the united states at the end of her foreign exchange trip
Revised 2: Having finished her foreign exchange trip, she requested a plane ticket to the United States at its end.
DOL 15
Original 1: he was incidentally unable to attend hour 15th high-school reunion he just couldn't make it because he lives too far away
Revised 1: Incidentally, he was unable to attend our 15th high school reunion because he lives too far away.
Original 2: it says that irregardless of the effect of poor weather the shakespearean play romeo and juliet will be sold out
Revised 2: It says that regardless of the poor weather, the Shakespearean play, Romeo and Juliet, will be sold out.
DOL 17
Sentence 1: does caroline know weather raul might of come to the class council meeting at 600pm or was he off of student government
Sentence 2: there are 3 qualities that are existing that give this field hockey team the better advantage in the league a terrific goalie a great offense and a winning spirit
DOL 20
Sentence 1: yes their going to welcome whomever want to come to the rally weather democrat or republican
Revised 1: Yes, they're going to welcome anyone who wants to come to the rally, whether democrat or republican.
Sentence 2: this car a 1966 mustang is now extremely valuable irregardless of what he tv show classic cars reports
Revised 2: This car, a 1966 mustang, is now extremely valuable, regardless of what the TV show Classic Cars reports.